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Art by Melissa
CBMD Part 6 
14th-Nov-2006 11:51 pm
VM - 121 Logan V Kiss
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“No, no way.”

Lilly stood and began pacing. “I don’t like it either; Logan, but I have the proof in more ways than one.”

“How so?”

“Another reason I ended things with your dad was because I found the cameras. Well, I went to Veronica – it was about a few weeks ago, and I asked her what I should do. I told her that someone had video of me changing and that I wanted it back. And, she got this look in her eye,” she whispered, looking up at Logan. “It was such a cold look and she says, ‘You don’t have to lie, Lilly. I know you’re fucking Logan’s dad. I have the tapes.’” Lilly turned away from Logan, going over to the mini bar and getting out a small bottle of vodka.

Logan’s eyes were wide open, hanging on every word. “Go on,” he urged.

“I tried to deny it. But she had dates, I guess the dates from the video. She turned to me and laughing and said, ‘Isn’t this funny, the princess of Neptune is fucking her old boyfriend’s father. I wonder what Logan will do when he finds out that information.’” Lilly looked at Logan as a frown etched onto her face. “I told her that she didn’t have the balls and she laughed and began boasting how whipped you were and that you’d believe anything she told you. I didn’t believe that she had the tapes, so I got a plan to go after them. But there was one thing I needed to know,” she said sadly.

“What?” Logan croaked out.

She looked at him. “I needed to know your feelings for her,” she said in despair.

Understanding crept on Logan’s face. “That’s why you went after me that day. You wanted to see if I was a whipped as she said I was.” Lilly nodded at this. “And when I pushed you away –” he left the rest unanswered, knowing she was finished.

“I knew that I had to get those tapes, but I had a certain time table, and by the time it arrived, Veronica had already cornered me at school, yelling at me to stay away from you and then she told me that I wouldn’t take you away from me, and if I got any closer, she would release the tapes. I prayed that she truly didn’t have them, so I went to your house, asking your mom to let me go into the poolhouse. I told her that I left my suit there. When I looked into the drawer, all my tapes were gone. But there was a few left and I grabbed them.” She walked over to the bed and took out one of the tapes that had been in her gym bag along with a camera and some wires. She hooked the camera up to the TV and put the tape in.

They watched as Veronica looked into the cameras and followed the wires to the bookshelf. She disappeared from sight, until they heard Logan’s voice calling her name. She had something in her hand as she rushed into the direction of the bathroom, the camera in the headboard catching her stuff things that were rectangle in her purse.

They watched as Logan came in view of the cameras, calling her name once again and then walked towards the bathroom, soon disappearing from sight as well. They soon emerged together walking out of the pool house.

Logan closed his eyes. He knew what day that was. That had been the first time Veronica had ever been there. He turned to Lilly voicing his question, “But that was the first time she was there. How did she know where the cameras were?”

Lilly looked back at Logan, taking her eyes from the screen. “She’s obsessed with you, Logan. I mean, she has her name and your name written in hundreds of pages of notebook paper, one line after the other. On and on. She could have easily watched everything.”

“Okay, then how did she get on my property?”

“Um, she could have used the servant’s entrance, or she could have figured away around it. Her dad’s an ex- cop and a private investigator. They probably know how to do all this stuff.” She listened as Logan took a deep breath, which sounded more than a sob. “I’m so sorry, Logan. I know that you care about her, but she…”

“Don’t Lilly—just don’t.” Logan lay back on the bed, his eyes misting. He didn’t understand any of this. His sweet Veronica had done this to him, to his family. If it hadn’t been for her then his father’s affair wouldn’t have become public knowledge; it would have been a secret, just like all the others. He would never have to know that Lilly and his father fucked.

This entire thing was like a fucking nightmare.

Lilly’s voiced pulled him out of his thoughts, “What are you going to do?” she asked softly.

His voice came out resigned, and weak. “I don’t know,” he whispered. “I don’t know.”

--

Veronica glanced around the quad looking for her boyfriend. She hadn’t talked to him since the morning she left, which left her very unsettled. She pulled out her cell phone taking another look – still nothing from him.

What the hell was going on?

When she glanced back up she saw him, his backpack slung over his right shoulder, walking with Dick and a few of his friends.

Veronica walked forward, going down the steps that led into the middle of the quad. They still had a little time before class started for the early session, and she wanted to talk to him.

The cold December breeze blew her hair back, the little hairs among her head tickling her. She pulled her jacket closer, suddenly chilled.

Veronica came to a stop in front of Logan, taking a look at his friends, glaring at them. Soon they got the idea and they left Logan. Veronica tried to catch his eyes, but he avoided them. She lifted her hand to his cheek and he flinched away from her. “Logan?” she asked wonderingly, shocked that he had flinched at her touch. Why would he flinch? They were in a relationship. He had just made love to her a few days before, and now he was flinching.

She called his name again and his brown eyes looked up at her in sadness and what was that – a little bit of anger. “What’s going on, Logan?”

Logan still said nothing. He swallowed hard and looked away from her, avoiding all contact.

Frustrated, Veronica stepped closer to him, “What the hell is wrong with you? Talk to me, Logan.” She sighed, not noticing that her voice had risen and that they had been attracting a small audience. In a gentler, and softer voice she asked, “Please talk to me. What happened? Everything was fine when I left Saturday.”

He looked up at her and finally said, “Yeah, everything was fine Saturday, or it was until I found out who you really are.”

Veronica took a step back. “What does that mean?” He was quiet. She took a step closer to him, “You can’t say something like that and just not finish.”

Logan took a deep breath and looked her into her eyes. “I know everything, Veronica. I know about the tapes, because Lilly told me everything.”

“Lilly-” her voice cracked.

“Yeah, I told him everything, Veronica,” said a voice from behind her. Veronica turned around quickly, her eyes narrowing at Lilly. She watched as Lilly walked around her and sidled up to Logan’s side. A place that no longer belonged to the curly blonde—it belonged to Veronica.

“Told him what, Lil? How you fucked his father and released the tapes? What does that have to do with anything?”

“Don’t lie, Veronica. It doesn’t suit you,” replied Logan, glancing at her before looking down at Lilly. “Yes, Lilly fucked my dad, but that doesn’t surprise me. It hurts, like nothing I’ve ever felt before, but if it weren’t for you, I would have never known and neither would the rest of the world,” he spat at her. His eyes were a mixture of sadness and anger, with a dash of pain - a pain so deep that she knew it touched his soul.

Veronica’s mouth widened in shock, “I didn’t do anything. Yes, I may have grabbed the tapes, but –” she left unfinished.

“But what, Veronica? None of these lies are going to work. Why would I release the tapes? Why would I do that to my family? Why would I do this to Logan? There is no reason why I would ever want to have them released. People are looking at me like I’m a whore, while you look like a pretty little princess. It’s not going to happen.”

Veronica geared herself up for a fight, “Why the hell would I want to release those tapes?” she shouted, her anger consuming her.

Lilly looked her in the eyes and said, “You were afraid that Logan and I would get back together. It’s not that hard to figure out Veronica. You were scared. Logan and I have known each other a very long time, and we have been together almost as long. Sooner or later he and I would have been back together and you couldn’t have that.”

“I would never do anything to hurt you, Logan,” she whispered desperately turning to him.

He shook his head. “You were the only one with the tapes. I saw it. That first day you came to my house, you grabbed some tapes. But, you missed one thing, you forgot about the cameras that were already rolling. It caught your every movement.” He took a deep breath knowing what he had to do. It would hurt him and slowly kill him inside, but he couldn’t let her get away with this. She had played all of them long enough. He looked down at her, towering over her. “It’s over, Veronica. After everything you’ve done to me and my family… betraying me… its over. I don’t want you calling me, I don’t want anything to do with you.” He glanced at Lilly and she gave him a small smile, before he turned and walked away, ignoring Veronica’s pleading.

Veronica could hear the crowd laughing at her. Her eyes filled with tears. This wasn’t happening. This wasn’t happening. She hadn’t done anything wrong. “Logan,” she called out, tears clogging her voice, her bottom lip trembling. She heard a snicker and looked up at Lilly. “I didn’t do anything,” she whispered.

Lilly cocked her head at Veronica, “Do you really think that even matters? God, Veronica Mars, did you really think that this was some fairytale? Did you think that you would come in and steal everything?” Lilly’s voice was hushed. “Here’s the thing, Veronica. This is my town and everyone in it belongs to me, including Logan.”

“All of this is because of you,” Veronica whispered.

Lilly laughed. “Of course. You’re not anything special. You served a purpose and that’s all there is to it. It was too good that day in class when I found that paper with your name and Logan’s.”

Veronica’s mouth widened in shock.

“I knew, right then, that that was the key. I needed those tapes, and you wanted Logan. It was so easy to make a trade. You did all the work for me, but you forgot one thing. You forgot to grab the tape of you actually grabbing the tapes. It was so easy to back track and get it. So really, this is your entire fault.”

“I didn’t release the tapes,” Veronica squeaked out.

Lilly grinned, “An anonymous source did. But you had the tapes, it was so easy to make copies and then air them after you sent some to the police.”

Tears of sorrow flowed from Veronica’s eyes, and she watched as Lilly turned to walk away obviously bored with their conversation. She couldn’t believe that this was happening. Lilly had used her. Used all of them and now Logan hated her and everything was wrong. She knew she shouldn’t but she called out to Lilly anyway, stopping her with a, “Why Lilly, why would you do all of this?”

Lilly turned and smiled, “Because I’m Lilly Kane, and I can do anything I want.”

--

The next few weeks were really rough on Veronica. She had spent most of her time crying into Wallace’s shoulder, her insides screaming at her, telling her how stupid she was.

School was rough, too. None of the 09ers talked to her anymore, or were even nice to her. They were cruel: slashing the tires on her car, writing horrible things on her locker. It was unbearable, she thought as she looked at her former friends.

The only thing that got her through the day was seeing Logan. Even though he wasn’t talking to her, or hell – even looking in her direction, she watched him. He was becoming more and more withdrawn: his eyes showing signs of sleepless nights, and thoughts of pain. Her heart ached for him, missed him, missed being in his arms.

She had tried to get him alone a few times, but every time she got the chance someone would rush to him, as per Lilly’s newly instituted rules. It seemed as though he was never alone.

There was hardly any fallout with Lilly and the other 09ers. Most girls envied her although they would call her an obscene name behind her back. Never to her face though, because that just wasn’t done. Lilly Kane ruled the 09ers like an Ice Queen, no one demanding a reason for her demands.

She had heard through the grapevine that the Kane’s were pushing to have Aaron serve time, but it was unlikely. Aaron’s lawyers were having him plead out the charges and he would only get probation and some community service.

Logan and Lilly didn’t get back together as she feared, but they were carefully trying to rebuild their friendship. It would be a long and difficult journey, but as Duncan as referee, they would be fine.

Veronica didn’t tell her father what happened. All she said was that she and Logan broke up. It didn’t stop her from crying into her pillow after dreaming of him inside her, of their night together. Waking up with his name on her lips, panting, sweat clinging to her body, her mouth tasting of his skin. It was slowly driving her crazy.

She never told Wallace that they had made love; nothing good would have come of it. He wouldn’t have understood anyway. She did apologize to him for not believing him and for neglecting him during the last few months for something that hadn’t worth it.

It was during the last week of December when she heard that there was going to be a New Year’s party at Shelley Pomeroy’s. She figured that it would be the best time to try and get Logan to talk to her. He wouldn’t answer her calls, he wouldn’t meet her eyes in public and when he was in close quarters with her he always had someone with him.

Well that was going to stop.

She put on her new white dress that she had bought while they were dating, wanting to wear it on a special occasion, although it never happened. It would be fitting for this night.

Once she was dressed, she picked up her phone dialing Logan once again. It went straight to voice mail and she sighed. She prayed that by the end of tonight she would get to talk to him and even though she knew it was improbable, she hoped that they would get back together.

--

She pulled up to the Pomeroy mansion, her body filled with tension. She didn’t know why, but she had the feeling that some thing big was going to happen that night. She didn’t know if she was over rationalizing everything or if the moon was playing tricks on her, but she knew this night would change her life.

She parked her car next to a bare spot of cars. She quickly got up, placing her purse on her shoulder before making her way in. She strode through the front door timidly, searching for Logan.

She made her way through the dining hall and kitchen before she saw the one person she didn’t want to see. She saw Lilly doing shots with Luke and a few of the others. Lilly took the shot like the pro she was and turned, with a finger in her mouth sucking a lemon for all that she was worth. Lilly smirked at Veronica, staring her down. She couldn’t believe that she had the balls to show up.

Veronica kept walking along, passing by a group of cheerleaders, giggling annoyingly. She kept on smiling when she saw Meg wave at her. It was nice to know that not all of the 09ers were cruel. She and Meg had become friends during the time she had dated Logan and it was good to know that they still were friends, even if they didn’t talk often.

She passed by Meg rounding the corner, making her way to the living room when she saw it. Saw him. Logan. With another girl, the new girl – Yolanda Hamilton.

He was up against the wall, his body covering hers, her leg raised on his hip, with him grinding hard against her, their mouths working against each other. Veronica bit her lips to stifle a sob and hurried away so she would not have to watch another minute. She made her way back through the dining room, and along her journey, picked up the first cup she came into contact with.

With visions of Logan and Yolanda in her brain, she hurriedly drank the liquid she knew would help dull her pain and soon take it away. She set her cup down at the nearest table and continued her way on.

With not knowing where to go she let the couple that was in front her guide her. She followed them around the house ending outside in the backyard. She made her way to the lawn chair, suddenly very dizzy and tired.

Passing the pool and couples that were in the hot tub, she laid down on the chair curling her legs up to her waist. She sighed Logan’s name and closed her eyes. She would only let them rest for minute, until the dizziness and the world that was suddenly spinning stopped. It would only be just a minute. Just a minute….

--

Veronica stretched lightly, blinking blurry eyes at the ceiling. She brought a hand to her head, a head that was aching. She turned her head looking at the room she was in. A room she had never been in before. A room that she knew she shouldn’t be in because that wasn’t the place she had laid down before.

A strand of hair flowed on to her face when she glanced at the huge windows that were letting in the warm morning light. She grabbed her hair that was tickling her face and tried to pull it around the ear.

She ran her hands along her head smoothing her hair back when she realized the chaos that was around her. She hurriedly pulled her hand back, shocked to discover a very large piece of hair coming with it. She looked at the piece of hair in her hand and the chaos on her bed and realized that all that chaos was her long blonde hair.

She hurriedly ran more fingers through her hair, more hair falling out along the way. Her breathing got quicker and she stood up making her way to the mirror, more hair falling to the floor.

She looked at herself in the mirror realizing that her hair had been chopped in many different places, not two pieces were the same length. Tears began to stream her face when she realized there was a message on her mirror.

Accompanied by a lipstick print of a full round, succulent mouth, the message read, “I hope you had fun last night, I know I did.”

Shaking, Veronica made her way to the door, opening it slightly and slipping her way out. Passing through the living room she took notice of those who were still asleep, crashed out on the floor, and would probably have one hell of hangover later that day.

She heard someone mumble a name and she looked over the side of couch to see who it was. On the floor, next to the couch lay Logan and Yolanda. He was curled against her, the same way he had been with Veronica weeks before.

Veronica watched as he kissed the nape of her neck, still asleep. She felt her heart break in another piece at the sight, but the shattering blow came when Logan moaned, “Lilly.”

Veronica brought her hand to her mouth and hurriedly made her way outside. When she made it to her car she wasn’t too shocked to see her tires slashed, but was shocked to see the words “Slut” written on her car.

A sob escaped her and knew that she had lost. She had lost everything. She had nothing left. It was then that she knew they had succeeded. They had won. And this would be a loss that she would never forget.

No Veronica, there is no such thing as a fairytale.

--

Fin

Final Thoughts

I know that some things are left unsettled, but those are for another time. I may come back to this little universe, but again I might not. It depends. This fic took a lot out of me. When I first got the challenge I figured a nice 3-5 thousand words fic, but this baby took on a life of its own.

I thank all of you who helped me. It would have never happened without you. And I thank you all for reading.
Comments 
15th-Nov-2006 03:30 pm (UTC)
You're leaving it there??? That's CRUEL!!
15th-Nov-2006 07:47 pm (UTC)
Yep, I'm leaving it there. Oh and download all 3 links. I made it that way so it was dial up friendly for those who wanted to download if they have dial up.

Thanks for reading.
15th-Nov-2006 04:53 pm (UTC)
Oh very nice ending. Loved it. Can't even say how much. Great job!
15th-Nov-2006 07:48 pm (UTC)
Thank you.
15th-Nov-2006 04:53 pm (UTC) - EMO now
Man! It took me forever to finish this (not that I'm complaining, it was an amazing story really). At first the only resemblance I found with the Little Mermaid was the "he loves me, he loves me not" bit (the Disney version), but then the ending...yeah, they both have equally sad, heart-wrenching, crushing endings (the original version). I haven't made up my mind, should you continue this? should you keep the ending? I must say as depressing as it is, I loved the story finishing like that, so either way I would be extremely happy.

I found some errors here and there so maybe is would be good to check the whole thing again, but despite that I truly enjoyed this piece. Awesome work!
15th-Nov-2006 07:47 pm (UTC) - Re: EMO now
If you have read the Grimms Version/The Christian Anderson Version then there are little things scattered throughout the fic. Veronica making a deal with Lilly, Veronica calling Logan her Prince, not having a mother, the Prince being taken away from her, and many other things.

And about they typos, I'll look through again. This monster is huge, and I've been through it a million times.

Thanks for reading.
15th-Nov-2006 04:55 pm (UTC)
aaaaah i feel betrayed! here i thought i was getting a fairy tale and i got some fucked up depressing stuff. damn you. :P
you seriously cannot end it that way. write another 3-5 thousand words or whatever and fix it! please? T_T
15th-Nov-2006 07:49 pm (UTC)
Hee... thanks for reading and enjoying. I'm going to keep it there for now, but I may do an alternate ending some day. We will just have to see.

Thanks for reading.
15th-Nov-2006 05:11 pm (UTC)
WTF!!! This killed me like no other.... Veronica... Logan.... GODDAMN LILY, shit.
15th-Nov-2006 07:50 pm (UTC)
Hee... thats what my beta's said....

Thanks.
15th-Nov-2006 06:51 pm (UTC)
I wasn't expecting this to be depressing after that awesome build-up of them getting together. There's already too much depressing stuff out there. I cannot believe that Logan actually believed Lilly. I really wish I had never read this.
15th-Nov-2006 07:53 pm (UTC)
Roz and I specifically talked about you when this was finished. We knew that you would find it heartbreaking and depressing, and I'm sorry for that. But it needed to be done.

If you've read the Grimms/Anderson stories of The Little Mermaid, then you should know that the story doesn't end happily. And since my fic was based on it, it was only natural for the story to end on it.

Thats why I built up the relationship, and then had it come crashing down.

Thanks for reading even though you now wish you didn't.. *I hope thats because of teh Angst and not because it sucked*.
15th-Nov-2006 08:10 pm (UTC)
So I'm probably going to be going against everyone else with my comments, so I'm sorry if you didn't want critiques. While I appreciate the hard work that must have gone into writing this and that you dared to write an "anti-fairy tale" for this challenge, there is something off-putting about this story.

I think that your characterization of Lilly and Logan were both believable in this AU, but Veronica would probably not have remained naïve and innocent after her mother’s murder. Also, throughout the story you made it seem as if Logan was onto Lilly’s faults and how she acts when she’s not happy, so its very hard to believe that she says she’s sorry and he is willing to work on rebuilding their friendship right away.

Also, I have a hard time seeing how if Logan really loved Veronica that he would not even hear her out, even though he didn’t love Lilly and was willing to meet her when she wanted to talk. On top of that, if Logan truly loved Veronica and not Lilly as you wrote, why would his subconscious want Yolanda to be Lilly, not Veronica?

You have a bunch of grammatical mistakes as well, but those can be overlooked due to the length of the story. I can understand how that might be hard for your betas and even you since it is so lengthy and you probably read it so many times it became difficult to edit anymore (I have the same problem with some of my writing as well).

Overall, I give you a lot of credit for stepping outside the box for the challenge and for creating a really great storyline, but I would work a little more on your character choices and development for your next story. I’m sure your writing will continue to improve!!!
15th-Nov-2006 08:18 pm (UTC)
About Veronica, I felt that even though she was a little jaded, she wasn't as jaded as she was in canon. Yes, her mom was killed, but Keith tried to protect her from all of that as much as he could. So, I'm not sure if that didn't come across well enough for you and if thats the case I'm sorry.

And on the Lilly/Logan issue, I went back and forth a lot of the time with it. I discussed it with my beta's and they said and I agreed that with everything going on in Logans life that he couldn't take another heartbreak. Which is why he wouldn't listen to Veronica when she tried talking to him.

Thanks for the critique, I appreciate it. And yeah this thing so huge, that it was hard to find all the mistakes.
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15th-Nov-2006 08:50 pm (UTC)
Thanks.

And well have you read the original version of The Little Mermaid? In the original story, the mermaid doesn't keep her Prince....

Thank you for the comment, and I'm glad you enjoyed.
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15th-Nov-2006 09:01 pm (UTC)
Well, you have tons of my thoughts on this fic, but I wanted to put them out here.

The way you set up the AU made this work, really. Veronica isn't so naive, but still not as jaded as she was post Lilly's death.

I still adore that Lilly was a manipulative bitch, and that she was still able to wrap everyone around her little finger.

I can't even describe how much love I had for that dance, the first kiss and the smut scenes between them. They worked so well as a couple, and then to see it fall apart so horribly was heartbreaking, but fitting.

That ending is just cruel, but you already knew I was going to say that. That party will certainly change Veronica, right?
15th-Nov-2006 09:16 pm (UTC)
Thank you darling, and of course that party will change V... hmmm... it'll change her, but I don't think for the better.
15th-Nov-2006 11:18 pm (UTC)
*cries*

WOW, that was one loooooooooong fic. So not complaining though because I heart long fics and it was the prefect distraction from my Motion Graphics homework :D

Now the comments. I LOVED this fic. LOVED. I love AU and I love it when Lilly is a bitch in them and when Veronica is naive. I also enjoy Veronica when she's naive in AU fics. Everything flowed so well and the smut was so good, lol! In my opinion the characterizations were spot on. And yes that ending seriously killed me just because it did seem that Logan honestly cared for Veronica and it was hard to see him turn on her so quickly and to not believe her especially when since Lilly has done nothing in the past to be trustworthy or believable.

A girl can dream/hope/beg for a sequal right? Where Veronica goes all grr, seeks some revenge and get's Lilly to fall from her high horse? And then to have the truth shoved in Logan's face? And then for him to beg for her back, right?
15th-Mar-2007 07:33 am (UTC)
Sorry for taking so long to get back to you, but yes, a sequel is being written for the challenge at vm_whatif which is due by the end of June, I believe so it should be posted before then.
16th-Nov-2006 01:56 am (UTC)
That was great. But i Was hoping there was going to be a happyliy ever after for veronica !!!!!!!!!!!!
15th-Mar-2007 07:35 am (UTC)
Awww... no happy ending on this one, but there may be on the sequel, which I am currently writing right now, so look for that in a couple months.
16th-Nov-2006 05:35 am (UTC)
*sigh*

I should have read that this was a Grimm retelling, and not a Disney... It's not that this was a bad fic - I think it was well written, and an interesting take on Lilly - I just needed something sweet to read, is all. Ah well. Good job.
15th-Mar-2007 07:36 am (UTC)
Something sweet? Hmmm... that may happen in the sequel I am currently writing... probably not all sunshine and roses, because there is gonna be some fall out... but you never know....
17th-Nov-2006 01:01 am (UTC)
AAAAAAAAACK! HOW SAD! Loved it but hated/loved the end, :).
15th-Mar-2007 07:44 am (UTC)
Aww, I'm sorry sweetie, but there is a sequel being written, even though you're no longer in love with the show.
17th-Nov-2006 03:35 am (UTC)
I loved this, but I wish there was more. My only problem with Veronica is when she didn't confront Logan about Wallace's Cindy story. To just pretend it hadn't happened or assume that he'd changed doesn't seem like Veronica. But other than that I like your charaterzations. This really does seem like a modern retelling of a Grimm's fairy tale. Great job!
15th-Mar-2007 07:49 am (UTC)
Thanks. The whole thing about the Cindy story was that she was getting to know him and in High School there are a lot of rumors. I think I was rumored to have been pregnant six times and had four kids by the time I graduated... wtf???.

So, I wrote it as if she thought that all it was were rumors, no matter that she heard it straight from Wallace.

Thanks for the reply. Sorry it took so long to get back to you. College is hectic. But to let you know a sequel is being written, so look forward to that.
17th-Nov-2006 09:05 am (UTC)
OMG!!! You totally ripped my heart out with this!! I can't believe you're leaving it here! This was sooo good though...so freakin' sad...so freakin' long! Took me a few hours to read this!!!...I loved the soundtracks too!
15th-Mar-2007 07:52 am (UTC)
Thanks. Look out for the sequel... 'cause its currently being written... and I feel it may be another monster.... oy vey...
20th-Nov-2006 04:18 am (UTC)
Gah! Good...but CRUEL.

Lilly cocked her head at Veronica, “Do you really think that even matters? God, Veronica Mars, did you really think that this was some fairytale? Did you think that you would come in and steal everything?” Lilly’s voice was hushed. “Here’s the thing, Veronica. This is my town and everyone in it belongs to me, including Logan.”

*shivers* Pretty well done. Like most people, I was disappointed with the ending, but I still applaud your bravery. :)
15th-Mar-2007 07:54 am (UTC)
Hee... I love you icon. Thanks for the review.

I know that many people were upset with the ending, but I wanted to keep it true to the fairytale.

BUT do not lose hope... a sequel IS being written and it looks to be almost as long as this...
21st-Nov-2006 06:50 pm (UTC)
Wow, great story. And unlike what seems like everyone else, I liked the ending. It tied things up enough to not kill me, but left me wanting more at the same time.

And kudos for being the first one to finish the challenge. =) I'm working on mine right now (Sleeping Beauty). It was practically writing itself, but I managed to get myself stuck in a rut. *le sigh*

Awesome story, again.
♥ Vicki
15th-Mar-2007 07:56 am (UTC)
Hee... thanks.

Um.. demand has gotten really bad, so there IS a sequel being written. Thanks for reading.
22nd-Nov-2006 01:40 pm (UTC)
Damn, that was depressing ... but a very interesting take on the fairytale. Misa, you did a FABULOUS JOB!
15th-Mar-2007 07:56 am (UTC)
Thanks Jenn. A sequel is being written, and I pray it isn't this long...
25th-Nov-2006 09:39 pm (UTC)
that was so depressing. I totaally thought they'd get back together in the end. Off to read some fluff... great fic!!!! Lilys sucha bitch, lol :P
15th-Mar-2007 07:57 am (UTC)
Yeah, Lilly is such a bitch, but she may be getting hers in the sequel...
4th-Dec-2006 08:26 am (UTC)
Oooh. I'm ashamed to admit I put off reading this story until now. I spent most of the story wondering if you were going to finish with the traditional end to the tale, or the "happily ever after" version, and I was kinda delighted to see you went with the traditional.

I'd love to see a continuation of this, if you become so inspired. It might even spin off the end of the original fairytale well, with a darker, more cynical Veronica doing "good deeds" for her fellow students (solving cases) in order to regain the "soul" she thinks has been taken from her, and Logan as the prince she is continually tempted to kill (and does, verbally) and ultimatelly the prize when she's done her good deeds . . . *ducks head and blushes* eh, sorry, just thinking 'out loud', hope you don't mind too much.

Anyway, loved the story, and I'd love to read a sequal, if you recover enough to write one.
15th-Mar-2007 07:58 am (UTC)
I am recovered.... and um... a sequel has been plotted and is slowly being written... so YAY!!!
6th-Dec-2006 12:37 am (UTC)
Wow, congratulations on writing this epic. That was a huge undertaking. I'm sorry that you're not going to extend it. I understand how you can become fatigued by a long story. Perhaps after you've had a chance to rest and think about it some more? Maybe you could write it in smaller chunks? If you do change your mind and come back to this, I hope you have more Weevil in it. I can SO see Veronica getting stronger and getting even once she makes an alliance with Weevil and the dark side.

I do hope you'll come back to this!
15th-Mar-2007 07:59 am (UTC)
Well, I am coming back to this... a sequel has been plotted and I am slowly writing it....

How is Cuddling going?
13th-Dec-2006 03:16 pm (UTC)
Wow that took me about four days to read. Granted I was trying to study for finals and this was a distraction for me. I loved this right up until Logan listens to Lilly and doesn't even let Veronica explain anything. The end broke my heart. I really hope you come back to this at sometime because it was an amazing story and there are so many things you can do with it. great story.
15th-Mar-2007 08:01 am (UTC)
I am coming back to this. A sequel is being written for a challenge... and Lilly will get whats coming... and there may be some sort of happy ending... not quite sure yet, but it won't be as depressing as this one was.

Thanks.
28th-Jan-2007 07:04 am (UTC)
you.killed.me.

and i can't think of anything.

except the ending was heartbreaking, and i'm crying, but i loved it...

15th-Mar-2007 08:02 am (UTC)
Yes, it seems the ending has killed everyone, but I hope they have all been resurrected 'cause a sequel IS being written. So stay tuned for that.
4th-Sep-2007 03:42 pm (UTC)
Ok this is my second time reading this fic and I still enjoyed it like it were my first. It's such a brilliant AU, you should be proud of yourself :) Are you considering a sequel or are you going to leave it here?
21st-Sep-2007 07:40 pm (UTC)
Anonymous
i read this story a long time ago and just reread it again. the story is amazing; you are a talented writer. you mentioned at the end that you may do a sequel and i would love to read it if you did. especially one where logan realizes that veronica was telling the truth and tried to win her back. please let me know at jacobsjami@aol.com
jamie
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